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Fortonis

Post by devilslayer on Sun Apr 15, 2012 9:52 am

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Name: Fortonis Kingar
Age: 203
Homeworld: Xedar
Chosen God: Exitius
Race: Hell demon
Weapons:
Alkorin:
A sword made entirely out of fire, even the hilt, only the owner may wield it without being burnt. Alkorin is a legend that has been passed down through the ages, many a demon has spend a lifetime searching for it.

Kilodin:
A sword made entirely out of lightning. twin sword to Alkorin they have the same stats and abilities except Alkorin deals fire damage and kilodin deals lightning damage.

Abilities:
fire wave:
A demon ability known for its destructive power. It is essentially a wave of fire that hits all enemies around the demon, doing major damage. It hits everything in its radius, however it damages the demon's body and mind furiously taking up a huge load of energy. It is a last resort move that usually kills the user.

chain lightning:
A basic magic attack where the user shoots lightning at one enemy and it bounces around doing low damage to up to 20 other enemies. it does its maximum damage on the first hit (still not much damage) and after that the damage decreases from enemy to enemy. It decreases at a rate of 5% per enemy.

Description:
A hell demon is like a more powerful fire demon, except it cant have a special ability, they are very rare and serve Exitius or chaos only, Fortonis grew up like most demons, wandering the earth leaving a trail of lifeless corpses in his wake, he, also like most demons, keep a collection of skulls and other prizes from his kills. Fortonis became quite famous on his home planet Xedar when he stumbled upon two weapons of legend, Alkorin and Kilodin, since then he has been wary of other demons who may try to kill him for the swords, he is currently on the planet Rinel.


Last edited by agentaaa on Sat Apr 21, 2012 2:28 pm; edited 4 times in total (Reason for editing : agentaaa asked for it to be changed)

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Re: Fortonis

Post by agentaaa on Thu Apr 19, 2012 8:40 am

change it so that not every weapon and ability description is one giant run-on sentence. Commas are not an excuse for you to extend a sentence into it's own paragraph. In all reality, only 2 can be used unless you're creating a list, in one sentence.

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Re: Fortonis

Post by devilslayer on Fri Apr 20, 2012 10:35 am

how is that?

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Re: Fortonis

Post by agentaaa on Sat Apr 21, 2012 1:40 pm

surprisingly adequate. alrigh,t I'll approve this.

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Re: Fortonis

Post by devilslayer on Fri Jun 08, 2012 2:03 pm

yay XD gone for like a month but ok
guess ill join rp now

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