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Post by illidan the betrayer on Fri Jun 24, 2011 8:26 am

name:Flameseeker
age:18
homeworld:azeroth
chosen god:aeon

weapons:
1) warglaive of immolation
2) warglaive of chaos

abilities:
1)demon form ( it is an ability that lets flameseeker take on the form of a black demon increasing strength and agility as well as giving wings for 12 minutes )
2)immolation ( an ability that flameseeker casts it instantly burns his enemy and it also burns for 20 seconds

biography: Flameseeker was trained by his mentor illidan stormrage (illidan the betrayer) as a demon hunter but soon illidan became the betrayer leaving flameseeker to train himself. flameseeker was summoned in the heat of the greatest battle of all time against the burning legion having no idea what was going on or were he was his survival instincts kicked in and he spent 3 days living off the land before he figured out what happened.


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Post by devilslayer on Fri Jun 24, 2011 4:52 pm

1) for the abilities how hard are they for him to use i mean with demon form it would take a great deal of strength to change form and then control demon form and how often can he use it once a day twice a day more?

2) Please give some description for your weapons more than warglaive as some people don't know what that is (i being an example).

3) but soon later what is that?

4) the greatest battle of all time are you sure that's right i mean star wars had better battles i think especially the one with thos little furry guys.(please expand on what made it so great)

5) having no idea were he was. It should be where he was.

6) so what did happen can you explain.

7) your biography doesn't seem detailed enough please continue.

Cool spelling and grammar.

9) explain the burning legion a little bit so people know who they are.

10) was he only trained as a demon hunter or does he have more qualities.

11) please don't take all of your characters off of world of war craft or really any game for that matter please try to make some of them original.

I could go on but i think i have trolled enough for right now.

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Post by NemesisQ on Fri Jun 24, 2011 9:10 pm

Hey devil

1) The cost of using demon form is not something you can just rule over, it's his character and his decision, but it's still best to put some limitations though.
2) The greatest battle, as in his story, in Azeroth, with the burning legion not in comparison to other war scenes in games.
3) Plus, you can make a character off anything, i mean agentaaa made characters off Bleach, and naruto world, one my character has names from other characters in D.Gray Man ( an anime).
A Jedi is even in this RPG devil.

By the way FlameSeeker, you can have up to 3 abilities, oh, and please do explain how your character got into the world of Avalon....

4) I know i shouldn't be saying this since i have problems with grammar, but.... use capitals devil.

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Post by devilslayer on Sat Jun 25, 2011 4:13 am

Ok thanks but he still needs way more information and he should detail stuff a bit more if it is something most people wont know about. I still think the greatest battle just seems like taking it to far an amazing or glorious battle would be better. I was doing an example for demon form limitations cause if you can do it whenever then that would be way over powered. Also no big deal but i know him and he will turn this rp we have into a world of warcraft thing he will make all his characters so they are off of WOW and try to make WOW worlds and turn it into WOW then he will slowly turn try to turn it into WOW and if he can't he will quit or try to make a WOW rp where all the characters and enemies are off of WOW. (If you don't understand bascially he is obsessed with WOW).

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Post by agentaaa on Sat Jun 25, 2011 6:49 am

Ok, to clear up a few things here.
1) it's well within the rules and restrictions for him to make WOW stuff. I have included things from Metroid, Starcraft, Bleach, Naruto, Rurouni Kenshin(Actually a character specifically from the series.) and Dungeons and Dragons. AngusM has characters from DnD as well, not to mention SCP, and NemesisQ mixes and matches from the looks of it, as well as having a D. Gray Man character.
This is a multiverse sort of thing, so everyone will have related stuff to add, and it's not likely anything will take over, though a lot may cross over and between.

now, that said, onto Flameseeker's post.

The spelling and grammar, while not at the level Devilslayer's or NemesisQ's was at the beginning, can still be patched up a bit. I'd say it's adequate, but not much better than that, so please look for ways to improve there.
now then, please explain how this character came to Avalon, and began serving his chosen god.

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Post by devilslayer on Sat Jun 25, 2011 7:04 am

Also please explain game references a bit, Please.

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