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Post by blue on Sun Apr 10, 2011 7:09 pm

Name:jade
age:26/17
god: decides along the way
homeworld:mars/earth
sex:female
weapons: Deager and poison darts
abilities: Electricty generation,Projection,Armored,Extremly durable and empowerd by mystic sigils incised into her armor ,extremely strong. May posses other mystical abilities.

Biography:Jade was borned on mars,she had lived on mars up intill 26 because anylonger she will banised if any longer she will no longer be part human after 26 ,she have to willling decide to become one of the gem society warriors and fight. the transformation begins after her heart and mind made a decsion ,but she travel to earth as a 17 year old girl landed in the middle of the derest. None of the elders talk about the gem society warriors,because the topic was unspoken in till one's birthday then it would be explained .


Last edited by blueangel16 on Thu Apr 14, 2011 4:08 pm; edited 3 times in total (Reason for editing : rewrite)

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Post by blue on Mon Apr 11, 2011 9:59 am

should i add anything esle ?

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Post by agentaaa on Mon Apr 11, 2011 11:19 am

Without trying to be offensive, I would ask for some fixing, as there are numerous spelling and grammar errors making it rather hard to read. Also, a little more detail might be nice, as I can't fully understand a few things currently written.

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