Naruto fanfic

this is the firs fanfiction i have made, and the first non-school piece of work.




NARUTO: THE NEW CHRONICLES


CHAPTER 1: THE PORTAL

DISCLAIMER:
I don’t own, pretend to own, or pretend to pretend to own Naruto. It is
the fine work of Masashi Kimimoto. This is just a tribute to his fine
work to entertain the few people who will read it.
Also, while we
share a name, the Scott in the story and the Scott writing this are two
different people in VERY different circumstances.




“I
still can’t believe they split up” said Scott. He had had a bad day so
far, his parents announcing their divorce and then asking him…no,
pressuring him to come with them, and to forget the other parent
entirely. Both mom and Dad had a slew of reasons why it was the others
fault, and why he’d be better off with him or her instead.
He’d seen
this coming for a while. The constant fighting, the yelling, and the
arguments that rapidly got physical. And then they would come up to him
and pretend everything was fine, thinking he was still 6 years old and
that he still believed daddy’s knife slipped or mom banged her head on
the coffee table. They didn’t really care about him any more, so
consumed in fighting with each other. Since he was 8 years old he had
cooked all the meals, cleaned the house, did all the laundry, got
himself off to school, made the beds, replaced the lights because he
was the only one who cared enough to do that. The one time he slept
over at his friends house, he came home to blood on the carpet, laundry
all over, pots and pans strewn everywhere, and his mother holding back
his fathers knife hand while he used his free hand to stop her from
hitting him with a frying pan. They told him they were simply stage
acting, of course, and he pretended to believe them.
The only thing
that kept him sane was reading manga and watching anime. In a manga,
people had morals, ideals, and power to change their circumstances.
His
favorite was Naruto, because it had the ideal that if you worked hard
enough at it, your dreams could come true, real. Of course, his dream
was unattainable, for his dream was to live in the world of Naruto.
At
that point, he was thinking about how cool it would be to live in the
Naruto world, and imagined all the cool things he could do.
“Snap out of it”, he told himself. He had only a half hour to get to the Manga shop.
He walked uneventfully, reaching the store in about 5 minutes.
The shopkeeper, Mr. Kashi, looked at him serenely,” here to get the newest copy of Naruto, hmmm…”.
” I wish I could, but I got laid off from the deli and now I don’t have any cash“.
“What are you doing here, then?
“Just browsing, really.”
“No, I mean what you are doing here“? It’s a thirty minute walk to here from your house, I should know, I live across from you”.
“ I dunno, guess it’s just better being here than at home.”
The
old man looked at him, peering through his large monocle, the other eye
lost in a war long ago, which now has an eye patch over the wound.

“You’re doing on better with your parents”?
“Worse. They are splitting up now, and both of them are trying to convince me to come with them somewhere.
”The old man peered at him carefully, as if judging him to be worthy of something.
“So you’re truly not happy with your life?”
“Well, ya, my only friend is Jesse, and he just moved”. Honestly, there’s not much I care about anymore. Almost makes me sick.
Kashi straightened suddenly, a look of purpose in his eyes, “come here, I have something to show you”.
They slowly walked into the backroom. “WOW, there must be HUNDREDS of manga in here”, exclaimed Scott.
“Yes,
but the one I’m about to show you is special”, Mr. Kashi walked over to
the small wooden chest in the back, proceeding to take out a small key
from his pocket. Unlocking the padlock, he procured a small book from
the chest. “Here” said Mr. Kashi, “this is my gift to you”. “Thanks,
Mr. Kashi!” exclaimed Scott. “Naruto: the new chronicles, eh? Is this a
retelling of the story?”. “You could say that” said Mr. Kashi, smiling.
“Anyhow, I have to close the shop, so I’m afraid I’ll have to kick you out.”
Scott ambled out of the store after saying a quick goodbye to the kind shopkeeper.
“ and enjoy your new book!” Mr. Kashi yelled as Scott walked away.
Scott
walked for 20 minutes before stopping to take a quick rest. He dreaded
going home to all the chaos and confusion of his life.
“well, might
as well start reading this book Mr. Kashi gave me, I got to remember to
get a good birthday present for him this year.” But when Scott opened
up the book, all the pages were blank. “Eh?” Scott mused, wondering if
the old man had played him for a fool. Suddenly, a strong wind actually
sucked Scott’s hands into the book, where they went into the pages.
“WHA-” was all he could manage to get out before being fully pulled in
by the book. The book then itself imploded leaving no trace of it or of
Scott but a small plastic bag, blowing down the street like tumbleweed
in the desert.


NARUTO: THE NEW CHRONICLES


CHAPTER 2: AWAKENING

DISCLAIMER:
I don’t own, pretend to own, or pretend to pretend to own Naruto. It is
the fine work of Masashi Kimimoto. This is just a tribute to his fine
work to entertain the few people who will read it.
Also, while we
share a name, the Scott in the story and the Scott writing this are two
different people in VERY different circumstances.




Scott
awoke to see a pink-haired girl, her face looming over him. She wore a
red dress, with a white circle on the bottom of it and another circle
on the back off the dress, near the top. She wore a pair of tight
shorts underneath the dress, with bandages wrapped along one leg. The
Bandages held on to a small pouch, with a small button clasp.
” Am I
in heaven, or are you the angel sent to take me there”. The pink-haired
girl giggled” you’re still alive, don’t worry, but you shouldn’t move
excessively, or you‘ll aggravate your injury”. ”I’m
injured?” Scott questioned “ I can’t remember-” suddenly , a loud
yell was heard,” come back with our meal ticket”. A group of
unkempt men, with ripped shirts and filthy jeans, running towards
them, clubs raised in their hands.”not these guys again” remarked a
blond spiky-haired kid , visibly annoyed. He wore a loud orange
jumpsuit, with many little bangles and trinkets, and a bandage with a
pouch on his right pant leg just like the girl had.” Hey, you look just
like Naruto!” Scott realized, “How do you know my name” said Naruto,
confused by this strange person that they rescued.
“Naruto, they’re
getting closer!” shouted the pink haired girl” let’s go!”. “wha!” Scott
stood up, surprised as these 2 people he had seen right after waking
suddenly take off towards the mob of people. The pink haired girl -
“Sakura!” Scott realized - went first, delivering a kick to the head
to the leader of the mob, who fell like a ton of bricks. a group of
them tried to surround Sakura, but she merely jumped out of the mob
with superhuman agility, throwing a kunai with an explosive tag in
their midst. The last thing Scott heard from that part of the mob was
“OH SHI-!” before the tag went off in a huge explosion.
Naruto ran
straight into the mob, slashing the ear off one of the men with his
kunai and stabbing one in the leg with the other. Suddenly, the entire
mob converged on Naruto, “now you’re too outnumbered to win, heh heh“
one of them boasted.” Heh, are you sure” Naruto asked, grinning,
“shadow clone jutsu!”. Scott knew of Naruto’s shadow clone jutsu and
watched him use it in the anime tons of times, but seeing it on T.V and
seeing it in real life are two very different things. Before Scott’s
astonished eyes, 20 copies of Naruto materialized out of thin air.
Outnumbered and outclassed, the bandits nevertheless fought hard, but
in the end they were no match for the blonde ninja’s devastating
technique.
Scott breathed a sigh of relief, grateful one problem was
over at least. Of course, though Scott, I still have no clue what’s
going on...Naruto and Sakura ran back to Scotts’ position. Naruto
started talking, “listen, we have to take you back to our village to
see granny Tsunade, our Hokage. I know it’s a pain, but-“,he was cut
off by a huge explosion that rocked the earth beneath their feet. A
voice, low and sharp, was heard booming, “ you have something I want,
children. Give me the boy, genin, and I promise not to hurt you,
refuse, and I shall strip the flesh from your bones”.” who do you think
you-” Naruto was interrupted by a slicing pain, a small hole appeared
in his shoulder. Two senbons, perfectly aimed, proceeded to hit both
Naruto and Sakura in the neck. Naruto and Sakura both toppled over,
unconscious.
“Humph“ the voice complained “, I only put them in a
death state instead of killing them. Oh well, it’s just not easy,
throwing at 500 meters“. Scott became afraid, realizing that this man
COULD kill him in an instant. what does he want with me, Scott
wondered, and for that matter, why me?. suddenly, a blue, square and
flat square of blue energy opened in front of Scott. A tall man emerged
through the square, in front of Scott. He wore simple black shirt and
pants, with a small image of a red half moon on the shoulder being the
only feature. The man was slight, but strong, with a large face and
purple eyes. His hair was chocolate brown, spiky, and had a single hair
that fell down across his face. His eyes looked cold and dark, as if he
truly didn’t see through him. He seemed to radiate fear, with but a
glance he terrified Scott. ”Now just to check if you have the power,
The man said, a savage grin on his face as he prepared to throw a
senbon. “No, don’t!” Scott screamed, more than a little terrified of
the figure in front of him. The man threw the senbon at Scott, directly
for the head. Something seemed to click inside Scott, and when next he
looked the senbon was caught in his hand, his hand firmly clenched
around it. “I did that?” Scott said, astonished and confused. “Hehe,
seems you do have the power.” the man smirked maliciously “maybe a
little too much. Too much potential here, yes. I’ll just tell him you
gave me no choice but to end your worthless life.”. the man picked
another senbon out of his pocket “I’ll be getting rid of the one
obstacle keeping me from the master, and Rixxir will be his right hand
foreve-”
“Chidori!” was heard a second before the white-haired man
known to Scott as Kakashi. His hand was enveloped in a blue aura of
chakra, with lightning moving around it. He thrust this hand into
Rixxir’s chest, going right through it. Rixxir screamed in pain,
stumbling” this isn’t over. Suddenly a blue portal appeared in the
floor below Rixxir, which he fell through before the portal closed.
Kakashi suddenly turned to look at Scott and the unconscious Naruto and
Sakura ,” You guys have had a tough time of it, haven’t you?”.
They
walked back to the village slowly and cautiously, in case anyone else
attacked them. Scott was awe-struck by it. The massive wooden gate with
Konohas’ symbol was breathtaking and the village itself felt so
friendly and peaceful. Heading through the village at a brisk pace,
looking at all the sights, Scott realized this was definitely no dream.
When they finally reached the 5th Hokages‘ office, Scott was starting
to show exhaustion and was breathing heavily when he, Sakura, Naruto ,
and Kakashi finally reached her office. Tsunade was a tall woman,
blonde, with two small ponytails in the back. She wore simple blue
pants and high-heeled sandals. She had a simple gray shirt and a green
overcoat on, with a kanji Scott didn’t recognize on the back. A red
gem was on her forehead. “Well, Kakashi, who is this outsider, and why
have you brought him here”. “I found him with my squad, the only one
not in a death state, I then saw Rixxir, who threw a senbon straight at
his heart” Kakashi explained.” I went to intercept him, but was too
slow. Surprisingly though, he managed to catch the senbon himself,
which allowed me to hit Rixxir with a raikiri”.
“You, boy! Have you
had any shinobi training?!” Tsunade barked.” N-no, I didn’t even know
you people existed in real life until today” Scott stammered.” What do
you mean?” Tsunade asked. “Well, to put it plainly, I think I come from
another world, or a much different part of the world“ Scott explained.
“What is different about this world.” Tsunade asked, curious. “Well, we
don’t have shinobi and the only place your world is known of is an a
manga comic, that focuses on Naruto
” ALL RIGHT, I HAVE MY OWN COMIC
BOOK!” Naruto yelled, overjoyed. “DO I GET ANY COOL OTHER POWERS? DO I
BECOME HOKAGE? DO I GET A GIRLFRIEND?” Naruto questioned.” Naruto,
please quit badgering this guy so we can find out more“, Tsunade
asked,“ Now, what is your name, boy?”. “S-S-Scott, ma’am” Scott
stammered, still taken aback by all the confusion. “Now, do you know
why Rixxir was after you, and how did you catch one of HIS senbon“
Tsunade asked politely. “ I don’t know the answers to either of those
questions, and I don’t understand who that guy is“ Scott answered.
Tsunade took a small sip of tea before answering” Rixxir is a b-rank
criminal, known for his ability to make portals and his ability to
increase the speed of anything he threw up to 1200 miles per hour. He
left his village after he killed an academy student who he thought
wanted to kill him. He is very paranoid, and rarely works for anyone,
but Kakashi‘s report states he referenced someone as his leader“. “you
sent out a report, Kakashi-sensei?” Naruto inquired. “yes, while you
were sleeping. I sent it by carrier-pigeon.” Kakashi replied. Tsunade
continued “ well, since you seem to have no place to go, and since
Rixxir’s after you, I guess that leaves me one option. Scott, you will
bunk with Naruto for the meantime, and I will give you a pass for a
free meal at Ichiraku ramen for your supper tonight” Tsunade stated as
Scott’s belly let out a moan more suited to a dying giraffe “Then,
report at noon sharp tomorrow at the training field. Naruto will show
you the way.”. “Why the training field” Scott queried. “ I’m sending
Tenten down there to start your physical shinobi training.” Tsunade
replied evenly.

lol, no

in any case, could you critique this in some way? I have never really gotten a review of my work, and it would help my abilities immensely

sorry i just can't read anything naruto. It just really annoys me (Not you). if you posted some non naruto story i would critique you.
BTW, when and if you post another story for me to critique could you do the same to mine.

well, given that I DO have to expand my abilities, i won't just be writing this.

good because I'm not reading/watching naruto EVER

just wondering, but whats with all the hate?

my friend jacob goes on and on about it

...and your point?
my friend Tabu talks about his girlfriends for hours at a time, doesn't mean i never speak to them.